After reading the comment on my last elevator pitch, I learned a few things to improve on with my new pitch. I was told that my idea and business was a good idea and that it was prevalent in the area that the commenter was from which reassured me that I wasn't fishing in an empty pond. He told me that I should include more facts and statistics which made me realize that that was probably a good idea. However, finding facts on this thing I am trying to target would be quite hard as it is more of an opinion that comes and goes with time, not really something statistical. From this comment, I added some information about the interviews I conducted as that is the closest thing I had to facts regarding this topic. The commenter didn't really say anything that was bad or silly, therefore I cannot comment on that question.
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Final Reflection (Assignment 30A)
1. This semester and specifically this class is one to remember. This was the first class I ever took that we did activities and things that...
John, I think you made the changes from the feedback you were given. I noticed that their was more detailed information, which was the ideas given from the feedback. Being able to hear constructive criticism and then being able to learn from it is important and I think you did that very well. I also think you dressed well for the part and were clear in you business plan.
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ReplyDeleteI think you did a really great job of taking the comments on your last elevator pitch and using them to improve upon your second one. The changes you made were vital to helping us better understand your product. In the field on entrepreneurship, being able to understand your customer and their needs and wants is important and I think the changes you made in your elevator pitch prove that you know how to adapt to what the audience wants.
Hey John, I was the one that commented on your first pitch and I believe that you did a good job revising this one. Although you did not really include any more facts about the business, I believe that you did the next best thing. By including information from past interviews was a great idea, as it gives some insight into the type of people that would possibly use the service that you are planning to offer.
ReplyDeleteOverall good pitch. One thing that I would suggest is to begin with the issue first (lack of plumbers and electricians), and then go into the details of your company. This would help to grab the attention of possible investors, and make the pitch more organized. Great job though!
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